ONLINE SHOPPING VS HIGH STREET SHOPPING
Nowadays, people often talk about if it is better buy in online shopping than high street shopping because in online shopping is cheaper than high street shopping. However, online shopping have their problems; you can buy a shoes in one colour and when it arrives at your home the colour can be very different from the online shop (it could be more examples like size...).
In my opinion, online shopping is good but not in all things. For example, I buy my football T-shirts online, because buy an original T-shirt is so much expensive and online it are very similar and cheaper but when i have to buy another clothes (no sports clothes) I often go to shops looking for bargains but sometimes i end buying expensive clothes because i can´t find any cheaper.
Furthermore, I think that nowadays it´s good try to save money but not in clothes because the cheap clothes could turn out expensive clothes.
In conclusion, I believe that buy in online shops is better than buy in other shops but no is the best way to buy things, especially if we are talking about things like phones or laptos or tv´s which are so expensive and try to buy it online it couldn´t be a great idea.
By reading your essay, I cannot finally say if you like shopping online or not. The structure of your essay is as follows.
ResponderEliminarFirst you state that people think that shopping online is better because it is cheaper. However, you think there are certain problems and to support it you give an example (you might have told what the problems are!). Then you give your own opinion, you add another example and briefly introduce another issue: saving money nowadays; to end up by writing about other expensive items as tv sets or other gadgets.
As I see it, it is a bit confusing and you haven't stated good support for your arguments.
ADECUACIÓN: 1,5
COHESIÓN: 0,5
CORRECCIÓN: 1,5
RIQUEZA: 1,5
Mark: 5
you have write pity good on online shopping.
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